Friday, June 19, 2009

chasing a white rabbit

I was the modern-day Alice in Wonderland.
Not the 21st century Cinderella, like my mother
wanted me to be.
I drank what wasn't mine until I grew
into a big girl, who had instead of independence
a hole
that she fell into
and got stuck in large places
talking to all the mythical, glamorous creatures
that wander about in dark corners.
The only place of solace was the garden,
with its tall walls and its roses of
blood red and cotton white
Until the woman came and took me to court
and off with my head was all that was left to be heard.


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copyright Miss Erin McIntosh, 2009
please do not reprint without permission
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16 comments:

Priya said...

I love it! I think this may be one of your best ones yet.

Christian L. said...

I think this is the best poem of yours that I've read.

Sarah Miller said...

Dude.

(That's all I can say.)

Chelsea said...

I LOVE THIS. You've got talent, Miss Erin! :)

Color Online said...

Dark. Dark in the same way I think of Alice In Wonderland. Thanks for the read.

cuileann said...

Miss Erin! I agree with Christian L.
I love where you took the allusions, and your phrasing reads so well.

Natasha said...

I love this poem! (:

Alyssa Goodnight said...

Very nice! Love your banner. :)

tanita davis said...

Wow. This one is thought-provoking! Well done.

Little Willow said...

Love it. Love it. You probably could have guess that.

Sookie said...

Love it! It seems like it's just full of meaning, and it's a bit dark, too. To me those are the best poems.

Maddee said...

O_O Wowza. So...eerie. And amazing. I'm not sure what else to say.

Traci said...

you.wrote.that?
i agree with sarah.. DUDEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE

:D you are freakin awesome, can i have your autograph?????? :D :D :D

David K said...

I really like this one.

Alma Alexander said...

I *LIKE* that. A lot.

Danielle said...

Erin I love you :)

That was really amazing.

* nods *